四个方法让澳洲Essay写作更出彩_英文写手招聘

 写手指南     |      2020-12-14 17:11
 
  一些澳洲写手可能会问到:如果Essay写的句子都是短句,会不会因为太过平淡而拿不了高分。其实可以通过改写来让普通句子出彩。为了帮助在澳洲留学的同学们写好Essay,本文为大家整理了四个通过改写让Essay句子更出彩的方法:

 
澳洲Essay写作,英文写手招聘

 
  方法1.减少there be句型的使用
 
  there be句型很容易使用,但也很容易被滥用。在考场作文中我们可以见到大量的there be从句,但这些从句绝大多数可以省略。举个例子:
 
  There are widespread rumours of job losses.
 
  可以改写为:
 
  Rumours of job losses abound.
 
  there be句型一般表示“某地有某物”,在修改时,可以使用一个恰当的动词进行替换(比如上面句子中的abound)
 
  又比如下面这个例子:
 
  There were more foreign students in the classroom than the natives.
 
  可以改写为:
 
  Foreign students outnumbered the natives in the classroom.
 
  除了去掉there be结构之外,这里还使用outnumber来代替more...than...这一个比较结构。类似的词还有outlive,outshine,outclass,outgrow,outperform等。
 
  方法2.使用介词短语
 
  很多时候,一个简单的介词往往会比一个从句更为出彩,举个例子:
 
  (a)When they arrived at the police station,they were taken to an interview room.
 
  (b)I'll call you when I arrive.
 
  可以改写成:
 
  (a)On arrival at the police station,they were taken to an interview room.
 
  (b)I'll call you upon arrival.
 
  这里使用on以及upon介词来代替when从句,类似的道理,可以灵活使用in,at,during等其他介词来代替从句,起到事半功倍的效果。
 
  方法.3省略关系代词
 
  除了there be句型之外,定语从句在Essay写作中的使用频率也非常高。但从简洁性的角度考虑,绝大多数的定语从句同样可以精简。举个例子:
 
  From childhood,he had an instinct that made him excited and interested in all things which were electronic.
 
  可以改写成:
 
  From childhood,he had an instinctive feel for all things electronic.
 
  这里将关系代词which以及that省略,并且原句中made him excited and interested in语义重复,可以使用instinctive feel来代替。
 
  又比如下面这个例子:
 
  An Ideal Husband is a film adaptation of Oscar Wilde's play that tells the story of a popular politician who was involved in a scandal that led to his downfall.
 
  句子可以改写成:
 
  An Ideal Husband is a film adaptation of Oscar Wilde's play that tells the story of a popular politician brought down by a scandal.
 
  这里将关系代词who以及that省略,句子的意思不变,但显得更加简洁。在作文修改中,可以尝试着将不必要的关系代词删除,或者将其转换为分词结构或名词词组,以达到精简的效果。
 
  方法4.词性转换
 
  英语中有一部分单词具有多重词性,巧妙利用词性转换,可以写出精彩的句子。举个例子,要表达“他在上海度假”,我们可能会写He goes on holiday in Shanghai.
 
  但其实还可以写成He holidays in Shanghai.这里将holiday作为动词使用,含义是“在……度假”。
 
  又比如:
 
  (a)Arthur Ashe is the captain of the U.S.team.
 
  (b)Mr Cunningham,who teaches creative writing at Yale University,is extremely funny and psychologically observant,but he does not believe in happy endings.
 
  上面句子可以改写为:
 
  (a)Arthur Ashe captains the U.S.team.
 
  (b)Mr Cunningham,who teaches creative writing at Yale University,is extremely funny and psychologically observant,but he is no believer in happy endings.
 
  第一个句子使用captain的动词义“率领”,人物形象更为有力。第二个句子使用believe的名词形式believer,这样语气更为强烈。
 
  总结
 
  长难句的使用是一件有门槛的事情,在没有充足把握的情况下,我们写手在Essay写作时应该避免使用长难句,而写自己有把握的句式,同时,通过一定的改写方法把普通句式写得简洁漂亮,这才是取得高分的可靠方法。