小编发现很多麦考瑞写手不知道如何去组织essay写作观点,或者叫做如何串联观点。在这里,小编觉得大家有必要在提高写作能力的同时还能提高理解力。因为这些内容在平时上课时老师也不会轻易教,但是对你自己又比较重要。下面就来看看要怎么去组织好自己的观点!
组织essay写作观点的限制
大家一定看过许多类型的essay写作范文。在不少范文里,都罗列了1-3个不同的个人观点,连接这些观点的词通常都是firstly...secondly...at last等等。假如你的理解能力没有那么出色,很容易会作者似乎在一段里提出了三个主题。例如这一段:
Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world.Today,however,growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem.
What are the causes of the increased demand and what measures could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?
范文里有一段这么写的:
Firstly,population explosion is the factor of utmost importance,which has led to the global surge in potable water requirement.Secondly,increased pollution of natural fresh water reserves due to urbanisation and industrialization has compounded this demand.Furthermore,in modern times,the growing use of fresh water for activities like recreational swimming has also catalysed the surge in global water demand.
里面提到了三个观点(three ideas)
1.population explosion is the factor of utmost importance(人口爆炸增长导致了淡水资源需求的剧增)
2.increased pollution of natural fresh water reserves due to urbanisation and industrialization has compounded this demand.(淡水资源储备随着环境污染,城市化和工业化而越来越稀缺)
3.the growing use of fresh water for activities like recreational swimming has also catalysed the surge in global water demand.(与淡水有关的娱乐消遣活动导致了水资源需求的剧增)
这三个观点,看似独立实则一致。就是围绕着increasing demand of fresh water淡水资源的需求增加,再进一步解释就是围绕着“到底是什么”而导致了淡水资源的增加。
筛选essay写作观点
当我把观点罗列出来给你看,就像上面一样,你一定会觉得很容易理解,似乎并不难写。而事实上绝非那么简单,不然为什么那么多同学屡战屡败呢。
比如下面的例子,是一位同学的真实内容。贴给大家看希望你们体会体会,对比对比,找找文章里的问题到底在哪:
Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities.Others,however,say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
其中一段是:
There are also numerous methods to tackle this issue.Keeping a regular and correct lifestyle can make people become physically healthy.For example,eating healthy food instead of junk food,such as fast foods,small snacks and so forth,allows us to gain better nutrition.In addition,it is beneficial for people's health to change their ways of going out.The Students,whose home is near to their school,go to class by riding bikes or even walking,and commuters can adopt the same approaches to going to companies.In this way,not only will people enhance their physical health but also our environments can be improved dramatically,since the green transportation may reduce air pollution.
段落中两个观点分别是:
Keeping a regular and correct lifestyle can make people become physically healthy
it is beneficial for people's health to change their ways of going out
你来理解下,是不是这两句话是一个含义呢?
“保持良好的生活习惯可以维持身体健康”以及“改变人们的出行方式对健康有好处”。出行方式不就是生活习惯的一部分吗,这么写观点会让文章绝对不会超过6分。你可千万不要嘲笑这样的段落,或许下一次你也会这么不经意的写出来。之所以犯这样的错误,就是因为在整理观点时没有筛选出有效的观点!
我会如何写这一题呢,如果需要围绕主题罗列几个不同的观点,我会这么写:
Firstly,physical and psychological benefits created by sports activities contribute to a better healthy body.Regular practice of games like badminton and basketball increases the heart rate and burns the deposited fat from the body that in turn can help improve the health of the individuals.Furthermore,engaging in games can improve the concentration and relieve stress accumulated at the workplace.Thus,sports related activities helps the people in leading a healthy lifestyle.
如果只有一个观点,我会这么写:
On the one hand,some people think that the best solution in improving public health is by providing a lot of sports facilities in the society.The existence of jogging tracks facilities,athletic fields,basketball hall or football ground in residential areas would trigger the residents in doing some exercises.With the increasing number of people who do physical exercises,it is expected that the rate of several diseases which are caused by unhealthy lifestyles,such as diabetics,heart attack or obesity would be reduced.Consequently,public health expenditures would be declined and could be allocated for other important aspects such as education or public transportation.
举了那么多例子,小编只想强调一点:每一段只能有一个topic!允许你有多个opinions,但是要注意这些opinions一定要紧紧围绕在topic周围,同时还要从不同角度出发去思考,有同学会说想不出许多观点怎么办?那只能从一个观点出发,去思考reason,effect,example和结论,就像上面的例子那样。essay考验的是写作能力,写作能力代表的就是思考能力。多动脑绝对是提高写作水平的最佳方法!